Rashid and Haroun were travelling to the valley of k for Rashid to tell his ocean of stories to the citizens of k but all he can say is ark ark ark his mind was blank. When he went off stage. For me the most important part was when he could only sat “ark ark ark” because it basically made the end of his career.
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February 8, 2015 at 3:46 pm
You have shown some clear understanding of the events in this chapter and your meaning is largely clear.
Targets:
1) Always re-read and edit sentence length. Aim to use no more than one conunction per sentence.
2) Use capital letters for proper nouns (Valley of K).
3) You have used a supporting quotation but try to select one that will be more purposeful, a description rather than a little he of dialogue, perhaps. You have shown a higher standard of yourself in the past – try to identify figurative language and explain how it shapes meaning.